Tuesday, 5/23/00

Latin Warm Up: Choose from the words on List #21 (15/15 = +4, 14/15 = +3, 13/15 = +2, 12/15 = + 1) sub = ____(hint: submarine) super = _____ (hint: supervise) pre = _____ (hint: pregame show) inter = _____ (hint: interlocking) re = _____ (hint: review)

before throw thing stand over thing good maker hand make out throw stand under person throw into across carry carry able between throw thing

"Houston, we have (a) problem(s)...with the research papers..."
New Due Date for final draft: Thursday, June 1st.
Problems: (Examples when I give them back.)

• Too "thin"/ too general
• "Many new mechanics were experimenting at this time and many were not successful..."
• "...(he) was so successful that he started a small company that soon grew into a very fine industry..."
• "The rules were very simple...Wouldn't it be nice if they were the same today? But they aren't, they are far more complicated. We now have technical fouls, personal fouls, ejections, and many more complicated rules."
• "Disneyland was opened in Los Angelos(sic), California. Right away Disneyland was a very popular attraction."
• "It was at this very weak and impoverished time in Cuba that the concept of communism took hold."
• "...made the very first interactive video game in 1962...It was called "Space War." I never really found out what was the object though."
• Padding
• "Well, this is the end of the page and I better stop before I write too much."
• "I said that I would have the list later so I have it now."
• "In ______, There are many attractions to visit. _______ is an exciting place with lots of people and fun places to be these are some of the more historical one's."
• terms used without explaining what they mean
• HIV, internal combustion engine, retrovirus, gentians, Communism, embargo, historical tourism, colubrid, hiatus,
• HUH?
• no source citations/not following the format given
• organization problems/random facts
• relying on one source for almost everything
• still sounding like the source
• proofreading (not)
• missing parts

"A Sound of Thunder"