SHOW not TELL
"Don't tell us that the old lady screamed.
Bring her on and let her scream."
-Samuel Clemens
Describe in detail what this might LOOK/SOUND like:
"The kids at the bus stop are weird."
Compare two examples...
"My Room is Such a Mess" due Wednesday 9/5.
350+ words, ink, ndp, title, mess(y), gross,
disgusting, dirty, stinky, etc.