III. SHOW not TELL
"Don't tell us that the old lady screamed. Bring her
on and let her scream."
-Samuel Clemens
cool, pretty, fun, scary, weird, ugly
What does each of these things LOOK like?
These are actually opinions, NOT descriptions!
What's "cool" to you could be "gross" to me or your mom!
You need to show us what this looks, sounds, tastes,
smells, feels like!
Describe in detail what this might LOOK/SOUND like:
Compare two examples...
Practice: EXPAND! Show! Practice adding details...
What does it look like? Sound? Feel like? Show don't tell!
1.Some guys start fights and stuff.
2.He got trash-canned.
3.The quad was like a crowded zoo.
4.The dog hates being chained.
"My Room is Such a Mess" due Thursday 9/4.
350+ words, ink, ndp, title, mess(y), gross,
disgusting, dirty, stinky, etc.
IV. "Thank You, M'am"
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