SHOW not TELL
"Don't tell us that the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream."
-Samuel Clemens
Who is Sam Clemens? What does he mean? (He's talking about writing.)
cool, pretty, fun, scary, weird, ugly
What does each of these things LOOK like?
These are actually opinions, NOT descriptions! (Yes, I know they are technically adjectives.)
What's "cool" to you could be "gross" to me or your mom!
You need to show us what this looks, sounds, tastes, smells, feels like!
Describe in detail what this might LOOK/SOUND like:
Compare two examples...
"My Room is Such a Mess" due next Tuesday 9/16.
Show me the most nightmarish room imaginable. I want to feel, see, hear, taste (ewww), smell everything.
350+ words, ink, ndp, title, mess(y), gross, disgusting, dirty, stinky, etc.
SHOW! WDILL?