We can see red all around us. Red in the stoplights, red in the sunset sky, my favorite red 49er shirt. Red is my favorite color. It reminds me of my hobbies. First, I love my car. I have a 1972 classic Volkswagen Beetle. It is a convertable. My dad bought it for me. I worked summer vacation, and many weekend for his painting business.  He never pay me a real salary. I completely rebuilt the engine. Now it is in good shape.  My Uncle Randy did the body work, because he has a custom car shop.  He drives a Porsche. It's red too.
    I painted it fire engine red, That represents the car's power, energy, and speed. I love to get into my car on the weekend, and have my uncle drive me around with the top down.  I feel free and happy. Out of school, and out of the house.
    In addition, my car is one of my closest friends because she listens to me.  She never bothers me, and likes the same music. (haha) My uncle is always trying to change the music when we drive, but the car and I don't let him.
    Also, the color red reminds me of my number one Bay Area football team, the Forty-Niners. Their uniform and logo are red and gold. During footbal season, I wear red on the weekend to show I am a loyal fan. (Even if the Raiders are playing better this year.) I have been a 49er fan ever since I was a little kid. I always wear red during football season.
     In conclucion, that is why the color red represents me and my life.

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